After reviewing the comments from my inquiry group regarding my exploratory essay, I can reflect on the workshop process as follows:
1.) I believe the most helpful piece of advice I received from my inquiry group was the help regarding my run-on sentences. I am notorious for my long, verbose sentences that make sense in my head but read as very awkward and cumbersome. Lynnsey especially pointed out several places where I need to separate sentences for the paper to continue to flow. Other than that, my group felt I did a good job on this paper. I feel I can make it a good second draft with a few changes.
2.) Probably the least helpful advice I was given was the praise I was given on my paper. I know that sounds terrible, and I hate to say it, but I'm afraid it's true. I don't want people to be kind to my writing; I know I have a LOT to do to improve it. I also know that people have a hard time critiquing me because they may not know how to do this assertively (and constructively). Heads up, Josh, Joey, and Lynnsey: I can take the heat, I promise!!! Please don't be afraid to tell me how I can be better, because I will promise to do the same for you. We all have to get real with each other and I will take the criticism as best I can. After all, it's better we give it to each other than get it from Megan (when it's too late!).
3.) For my inquiry group, I had a few questions about comments:
a.) How do you guys think we should go about citing the handouts and assignments given to us to compare in this essay? I'm not sure on all the details of each reading, so I'm going to email Megan to get some advice. Let me know what you think...
b.) Do you think the choice to leave my "questions I was left with" paragraph as it is? or should I do like y'all and integrate it into my body paragraphs? I wasn't sure about the choice, but I think it could work either way. Personally, I liked that y'all integrated them, but I couldn't figure out how to do so without making the paragraphs even longer than they already are! Please advise...
4.) As for the changes I intend to make on the second draft, I plan to do the following:
a.) Amend my run-on sentences where my inquiry grouped marked them to make things more clear
b.) Possibly integrate the questions I was left with after comparing these articles into the main body of the essay rather than leaving them at the end
c.) Revise my in-line citations and complete the Works Cited page using proper MLA documentation style once I receive more information about the readings' origins
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